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A SOULS LOSS

23 Apr

Once on a Mondays Stroll
I came across a hidden Cross.
Polished to a Spot it glinted with beauty,

It told me of devotion, hard work and Love
that a Carpenters hand had immortalized.

But lifting it up I found a termites nest,
Left unattended, they had crept up on it
And were now eating through Someone’s Salvation!

©njugunaXavier2011

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Posted by on April 23, 2011 in Creative thought

 

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One response to “A SOULS LOSS

  1. Baru

    April 24, 2011 at 3:58 pm

    The termites imagery is powerful! The fact that a cross looks shiny but when upturned termites are making a meal of it… Good work as always but you should consider structure maybe;
    Try making each stanza an equal number of lines.

     

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